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A grave futility of words and sighs,
these fruitless porters void of pregnant means
impeach the cries that tether Ego's ties
to all the magistrate of Id's machines.
And yet, tho stars deride the mortal strum
as liveliness of trifles or disdain,
the founts of Delphi shall my pen become
to scribe on Triton's waves with high refrain—
O come, waters deep, swiftly from your keep!
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Contest entry for the #Rhyme-and-Reason contest [link]

The basic idea is the occasional inability and ineptitude of words to describe anything of great importance ("pregnant means") and serve only to further frustrate the writer (lines 3 and 4). However, that doesn't seem to stop the speaker from continuing to write, because often there is no other thing that brings catharsis like creating a work of art from nothingness. The volta I put into line five because, well, that was the natural break for it.

The rhyme scheme is ABABCDCD EE (in the same line). This
"sonnet petit" form has been dictated by ~tina-go-lightly.

PS. Oh my gosh how do you link people's profiles???
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~TinPenguin Jul 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Short but great poem! Glad I found the Rhyme&Reason group, because it's shown me there are people on dA who write actual poetry. :D
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~ThroneLiesFallow Jul 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! Glad you like it!
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!li1121 Mar 20, 2011  Student Writer
So uh... My comments about this in #Rhyme-and-Reason's journal entry pretty much sum up what I have to say on this.

/end cheap way of getting out of writing a critique.

:)
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~ThroneLiesFallow Mar 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
WHOOOOOOO yaaay! Thankies much!
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~chess411 Feb 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very interesting. Forgive if I misread, but I love the mix of Freudian reference and Classical mythology.
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~ThroneLiesFallow Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yup you got it right, Freud and Greek classics. :P
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*rlkirkland Jan 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A pleasing style with unstrained rhyme. Nice! :)
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~ThroneLiesFallow Jan 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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*Parsat Jan 25, 2011  Student Writer
Use the syntax :icon<username here>: to link to a person. It looks like this (if I use you as an example): :iconthroneliesfallow:

The other one to link straight to their name. You can do that by using :dev<username here>: That shows up as ~ThroneLiesFallow.

As for the poem, I thought it was much easier to understand than your other works, but no less deep. Your allusions to Greek mythology are a unique distinguishing feature that I like in your poems.
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~ThroneLiesFallow Jan 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Ah thank you so much. :dev<reader2951> *crosses fingers*.

I hope it gets a placing in the contest!!! I love Greek mythology; it's so fun.
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